Response to Tutor Feedback Assignment 3

Response to Tutor feedback Assignment 3

Overall Comments

Please note Assignment 3 was agreed to be submitted after Assignment 4.

Thank you very much for my feedback. I am extremely pleased with the feedback which highlighted the progress I have made and demonstrating good practises that are developing. This part of the course was the most developmental for me in terms of confidence and setting/ achieving aims set by the exercise or myself. It was also the most fluid in terms of progress/ process and working structures that I have put in place.

Ways of working have significantly improved and recording what I have researched even if it hasn’t been relevant (no dialog/ opinion to present) it has made me step back to analyse and “make valuable and pertinent connections between research, media, process and the aims”. I am also making lists on excel sheets to streamline and focus work, exercises and also using mind maps.

I feel more confident to ask questions about what I am trying to achieve which has meant that my reflections are more “honed, specific and thoughtful”. I am really enjoying focusing more on the connections I make between my own and other works it’s very inspiring.

I can clearly see the importance of the process of preliminary sketches, research, and exploration of marks and composition and how it feeds into my drawings/ assignments.

The hangout I had after assignment 4 with my tutor was really beneficial as it has really made me think about how the viewer/ audience see’s my work and the visual language it contains.

The approach of building up stages of the drawing is allowing my need to be expressive but convey a sense of reality or a representation of the subject I see.

I am extremely interested low-tech and traditional processes (stains, blots, hand-collage, and drawing) with digital:  print, photography, manipulation, editing and layering -digital collage and would like to explore this further during assignment 5.


Feedback on the Assignment

I am really pleased with the feedback on the assignment.

I will definitely use editing, selecting key elements from each sketch to plan and compose the final outcome. I enjoyed the process cropping photographs/sketches and notations which I can see how help plan the final outcome for future work.

“The way in which you grid, layer and build-up the drawing can be read as an analogy to the construction of a building” I really enjoy this interpretation and was an element of the process of the consideration of marks whilst I was constructing the bottom layer wet media onto the cardboard. I can see how the increase in density of tone / mark (in some areas) and left leaner at the edges conveys a sense of depth, pulling the viewer in and I also find the density of marks changes each time you view the drawing which I find exciting. I need to do more research on the process of considerations of removing or editing from the drawing as this is exciting and a beneficial process. This editing process (what is left out) is as important as the content itself.

I am so pleased with the following comment “This assignment evidences an increased experimentation and confidence in the visual language, mark-making, composition and general analysis and decision-making in the process of making a drawing. Well done”.





Assignment 3 Tutor Feedback (Fourth Assignment Submission Feedback)

Formative feedback

Student name Alison Dollery Student number 515318
Course/Unit Drawing 1 Assignment number Three
Type of tutorial (eg video/audio/written) Written

Overall Comments

Thank you for the care taken in preparing and organising your portfolio.  The portfolio was supported by a link to the learning log.  Portfolio contents: Two sketchbooks, with a few loose drawings, the assignment, separate exercise and preparation work.

To clarify: it was negotiated to submit Assignment 3 after Assignment 4.

I understand that you have transferred to the Fine Art pathway (from Creative Arts), therefore the assessment statement reflects this.

I will comment upon specific aspects under each of the headings.  In relation to you reflecting on and responding to feedback from assignment 4, you have acted on the feedback and this is informing how you are thinking about, planning and executing your drawings.

There is an increase in confidence in how you explore your chosen materials and this is informing the quality of your mark-making, composition and  building-up of the drawing.  It looks like you are considering how to build-up the drawing in stages.  What is of equal importance in editing and selecting the marks, tonal values and composition to best lead the viewer’s’ eye and convey your aims.

There has been a development in the quality of your reflections and they are much more honed, specific and thoughtful.  You make valuable and pertinent connections between research, your media, process and the aims you are setting yourself.  You are learning to be more concise and focussed in your reflections, whilst offering a deeper quality of analysis- less what you ‘do’ and more on the connections you make on your own and other’s work.

It is clear that throughout this assignment you are learning from the exercises, projects and reflected research.  You are then applying chosen aspects of your learning to the process of setting your aims, experimentation, prep and building-up the drawing.

Well done.

Assignment 3 Assessment potential

 “I understand your aim is to go for the B.A Fine Art Degree and that you plan to submit your work for assessment at the end of this course. From the work you have shown in this assignment, providing you commit yourself to the course, I believe you have the potential to succeed at assessment. In order to meet all the assessment criteria, there are certain areas you will need to focus on, which I will outline in my feedback.”assessment (see Conditions of Enrolment, Section 2 a). Contact the OCA Course Advisors to discuss this further.

   Feedback on assignment

Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity

 You undertook a number of rough preparatory drawings to explore the location, visual language and inform the assignment outcome.  Through your reflection and analysis you thoughtfully approached the planning of the final outcome in a purposeful and interesting way.

Through editing and selecting the key elements from each sketch, you were better able, to plan and compose the final outcome.  Your use of cropping and notations helped in your thought-process and decision-making.  These are good strategies and a practice to take forward and develop as you progress. (see Pointers)

In the final outcome, it’s good to see a rich, variety of mark-making qualities in chalk, charcoal and ink on cardboard.  There is a varied approach to both a lightness and density of working, this offers an interesting narrative in itself to the drawing.

The way in which you grid, layer and build-up the drawing can be read as an analogy to the construction of a building.  The framework of an early grid, dripping of ink and wash provide an interesting structure of marks and surface.  Then increasing in density of tone / mark (in some areas) and left leaner at the edges.  Can you see how this approach works well providing a juxtaposition of leaner aspects against more dense elements of the drawing.  This conveys a sense of depth and interest for the eye.  In future work it would be good to see you developing this consideration for what you choose to leave-out,  remove or edit and also what you put in or overlay. (see Pointers)

This assignment evidences an increased experimentation and confidence in the visual language, mark-making, composition and general analysis and decision-making in the process of making a drawing. Well done.


Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity

There is a lively experimentation across the sketchbooks.  This exploration is across media, digital and hand-drawn processes- evidencing good practice to continue and explore further, as you progress.

The sketchbooks have a sense of a genuine inquiry into media, composition, mark-making and linear qualities. There’s a joy and commitment to the quality of experimentation.  You are drawing upon your learning through this process.

Very good to see you varying your approaches throughout the sketchbook.  This experimentation allied with an analysis of what you are doing, how it’s working and how you can apply this to future work / an assignment outcome, is a valuable, useful process to develop.

The playing with and exploring of digital process and media, alongside wet, staining, blotting and layering offers exciting possibilities.  Ask how you might explore these processes and applications further?  These are ideas that have been emerging as you’ve progressed through the assignments.  This growing interest in low-tech and traditional processes (stains, blots, hand-collage, drawing) with digital:  print, photography, manipulation, editing and layering -digital collage. is exciting.  Are you interested in exploring these juxtapositions further?  (see Pointers / Research)

Ellen Gallagher ‘AxME’ Tate Modern, London

Dr.ME  Cut that out: Contemporary collage in Graphic Design

Wangechi Mutu

Hannah Hoch


Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

A good, varied yet pertinent range of primary and secondary sources.

Good consistent Harvard referencing throughout.

You are making connections between your research and the assignment itself.  You are becoming more concise yet purposeful in how you record and reflect on the research.  Continue to develop this as you progress.  This is good practice.

You are asking yourself questions as you progress, and in turn questions of the research you’re undertaking. Your reflection and analysis is deepening and as a result you are sifting and honing what is of purpose and value to your own development and practice.  Good practice to continue and develop.  (see Pointers).

See recommendations on ‘collage’ artists under Research / Viewing.

 Learning Logs or Blogs/Critical essays

Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

A well organised and structured blog evidencing your developing progress and the research and reflective analysis..

In this assignment there is a clearer synergy between your thinking, research and the drawing process. This has resulted in an increased confidence in your visual and reflective language.  Do continue to build upon this as you progress- trust to the process and strategies you have developed so far.  (see Pointers)

You have continued to use the blog as a reflective, analytical space. You have improved your logging of research and your quality of thinking.  By becoming more concise and analysing the purpose of asking questions, this has informed how you plan, experiment and make decisions throughout the assignment. Continue to do this through assignment 5 and as you progress.  Good progress here and this is increasing your reflections and drawing process.As you work on Assignment 5 you will need to hone your work for the assessment submission. To select work from across assignment 1 – 5 for your assessment (September submission for November deadline).  Look through the assessment guidelines and plan ahead:

Suggested reading/viewing


Collage including digital and traditional hand processes / combinations:

 Ellen Gallagher ‘AxME’ Tate Modern, London

Dr.ME  Cut that out: Contemporary collage in Graphic Design

Wangechi Mutu

Hannah Hoch

Pointers for the next assignment

  • Reflect critically on this feedback in your learning log.
  • Continue to use your preparatory drawings to help you decide which visual elements and composition you want to take into your final outcome. Ask yourself what these elements may convey: qualities in atmosphere, content / subject matter and tone (psychological or emotional).
  • Explore experimenting with the hand-drawn and digital elements of collage. This is offering interesting opportunities for experimenting.
  • As you progress to assignment 5: Reflect on the strategies and processes that you’ve found successful in this assignment. It is important for you to recognise what you have learned and how you are successfully applying this.  Take this confident approach into ass. 5.
  • Research into the artists working across collage: record which ones you feel some interest / connection with … what aspects interest you, how could you learn from and apply what you notice in your own work? Set some simple tasks to explore these connections.
  • If you haven’t yet started to: reflect and edit your portfolio for the formal assessment:

  • Follow-up on the research suggestions under Research and Suggested Reading / Viewing. Post your thoughts and analysis, and how you might apply this to your own thinking / making to your blog.

Please inform me of how you would like your feedback for the next assignment.   Written or video/audio

Well done, I look forward to assignment five.

Tutor name Cheryl Huntbach
Date 06/06/17
Next assignment due 25/07/17


Assignment 3- Final Version

Assignment 3 Final Version A1 Mixed Media on Cardboard

Queen Square, Crawley 2017 under construction

Above is my finished submission for assignmnet 3. I wasnt sure of the version I finished yesterday and got feedback from the student forum. I got really insightful and helpful feedback, so thank you to everyone that commented. I have added the much more distinction in the foreground with bricks and reflections of the trees on the ground. I am much happier with it as it is much bolder.

Process and Compositional Research

Inspiration for Assignment 3

Landscape and townscape are completely out of my comfort zone and although I had several ideas for assignment 3 and I started doing research to expand these ideas further and look at how other artists had executed townscapes. I came across a lot of technically correct drawings drawn either with or without the perspective lines visible which I could have easily done but as I have been experimenting with marks I wanted to push myself further looking at fluidity of marks and being more expressive.

I then came across drawings on Satchi Art by current artist Douglas Roberts (British)  who also drawn construction scenes. He has played with perspective through use of mark making and line. Again with a lot of landscapes/Townscapes I am more interested in the sense, atmosphere and general representation of place.

Douglas Robert

Fig 1 Parkway Under construction Douglas Roberts Charcoal on paper.

I then researched “townscapes done in chalk” which again provided lots of whimsical drawings of perfect beautiful villages, cottages and towns. although they are all beautifully drawn/ presented drawings, it would be hard to use this to represent Crawley as that is not the type of town that Crawley is.

I then noticed this drawing by Turner of Venice Fireworks on the Molo which has a fantastic sense of place about it. Further to my earlier questioning about realism vs expression in drawing, this again made me question what would I prefer to see of certainly leave an afterthought in my mind if I was to view a variety of whimsical drawings verses sensual drawings and the answer would be Turners sensual drawings every time.

Venice: Fireworks on the Molo 1840 by Joseph Mallord William Turner 1775-1851

William Turner 1840 Venice: Fireworks on the Molo Watercolour, bodycolour and chalk on paper.

Between the inspiration of Turner and Roberts I started working out how to apply this to the composition that I wanted to use.

Fig 1

Fig 2 JWM Turner


Reflection of Part 3 and Assignment 3

Assignment 3 Personal Aim 

To produce a townscape of my local town centre that shows accuracy of perspective but expression of line and a sense of place.

Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills

I am a complete novice with Landscape/ Townscape and have found this subject to be completely out of my comfort zone as I seem to deviate away from drawing organic matter and focus on man-made or geometric shapes more.  Having said that I have really enjoyed it and have used part 3 to explore my own drawing technique and used lots of questioning to do this. I took the approach of looking at how other artists represented landscape and how I can use this within my drawings. Exploring ways to make marks hopefully showing an excellent development of technical skills.

I have stayed predominantly in monochrome or used a limited palate ( with the exception of the inkjet drawings) so could have used more colour, so there is a future area for development there. Although I have looked at Theodore Gericault’s use of wash to create form, this is something I will progress and experiment more with. The use of ink and watercolour wash to create the blackboard prop for my assignment was purely abstract. Maybe another area to develop is to link the two together but for this assignment it was used only as a support instead of coloured paper.

Further to this I have also concentrated on composition and the overall design of the drawings. I have also started to become much more conscious of how the viewer see’s whats within the drawing. I used a composition that draws the viewer into the drawing by leaving the initial area blank. I tried and still need to work on the idea that Turner was very good at pulling the viewer within his paintings. I think I have demonstrated a good understanding and development of perspective. The final composition did have a lot of editing of the original scene, no people, no machinery as  I was consious to not crowd the picture plane. Interestingly in part 3 I have also ended this battle I have had between wanting to draw realism and being expressive (please see Aeriel perspective exercise).

Quality of Outcome

Although I had lots of ideas, developing the ideas was harder and still need more practise (direction how to do this). I noticed in part 2 (still life) I struggled for subject matter and now (including still life) I get inspiration really quickly (find subject matter really quickly) so am hoping the more I draw and use mind maps the development of ideas will become quicker too.  My town centre is predominantly 1950’s that is also currently under major construction which I decided to embrace within my drawings ( I am also interested in the concept that what you draw effects how you draw).

I am overall pleased with the quality of outcome of the drawing I have pulled the viewer into the composition by cropping the image and compositional device. I think I have represented the subject matter  (1950’s architecture and construction) interestingly by using construction lines (perspective lines) and expressive lines. I have also left the grid I drew on and any ghost lines on the drawing too for further effect also referencing  Artist Euan Uglow. I also find the more I look at the drawing from different angles I see different things.  I Intentionally have played with perspective with the lines of the building on the right being visible through the building on the left . It pulls the building towards you but It’s up to the viewer how they perceive this within the drawing. There is limited use of tone and maybe I could have explored light more however this wasnt the intention within this drawing as it was predominantly about line and perspective. The drawing of perspective is accurate to the scene (used grids and measurements). With hindsight I wish I had changed my view to get a deeper angle (like I did in the measured drawing of my hall which showed a deep perspective). I left the bicycle to represent human life. I hope I have captured a sense of place, the dominance of the plain 1950’s architecture mixed with a more modern building (right) and the fluidity of change and movement of construction. The only thing I was unsuccessful was the brief to try and include some foliage or trees in the composition.

Demonstration of Creativity

As a side project I spent a significant amount of time experimenting with Inkjet ink, image transfer and drawing on photographs. This an area I will continue to develop as I still havent mastered image transfer with laser jet and acrylic gloss yet. Although I have had some interesting results using inkjet and water/bleach and wax paper transfer. I have used mixed media again and deepened my knowledge of tone through the use of pencil. As per tutor recommendation I have started and continued to experiment with wash techniques, this has also led to further development of watercolour techniques (see sketch book and foreground/middle ground/ background exercise). I have raided my local library and watched endless you tube videos on ink/oil marbling, wash, watercolour techniques, coloured pencil techniques and although nothing fruitful has come yet the experimentation is there. This is starting to come through in my drawings but not everything I experiment with will be relevent to each exercise brief.

I have consciously asked why and how this will or has influenced my work. Also asking what can I put into my own drawings from any research. I am also trying to be more critical and analytical of my own work. Although I have to try not to go too far like I did in the critic of the foreground, middle ground and background exercise and remember it is my own interpretation, and am trying to see what the viewer sees.  What is clearly coming through in my drawings is my research with mark making and impression of artists on me.

I have used the 6 x A5 drawings and used collage to work out the compositional arrangement.


Although I have limited my research to more specific areas, I still hope I have demonstrated excellent research and feel very confident in my development of knowledge in relation to art history, contexts and debates and how other artists work, which in turn is helping to develop my personal technical skills.

I have also followed up on tutor recommended reading, Euan Uglow, Gaurdian Life Model Article, Morandi’s hierarchy of objects and have a date planned in June to finally get to London to visit the Welcome Collection.

As always the recent student visit to the Ashmolean, Oxford to see the Degas to Picasso exhibition  and a fantastic gallery on Ink drawings was very beneficial and a fantastic gallery on Ink drawings.

I have also asked for constructive feedback on the final image for assignment 3, it has been suggested by two sources that the top half of the composition is stroner than the botton and the squiggly lines are harder to interpret so will work to develop this further (Please see drawing marked final composition).

Context (of the Assignment)

Crawley was an interesting subject for me as I have ended up living here by default from moving to work for an airline as Cabin Crew in 2004 (prior to this I didnt live in any one place very long due to work or voluntary travelling).  I have hundreds of photographs of beautiful places from all over the world that I could have used but using a subject that is less beautiful encouraged me think about my personal reaction to  place in art and to how this develops within the drawings (also see Turner drawings). Personally its also a reaction to a realisation that life is what happens whilst you makes plans and this by default is now my place.