Assignment 3 Tutor Feedback (Fourth Assignment Submission Feedback)

Formative feedback

Student name Alison Dollery Student number 515318
Course/Unit Drawing 1 Assignment number Three
Type of tutorial (eg video/audio/written) Written

Overall Comments

Thank you for the care taken in preparing and organising your portfolio.  The portfolio was supported by a link to the learning log.  Portfolio contents: Two sketchbooks, with a few loose drawings, the assignment, separate exercise and preparation work.

To clarify: it was negotiated to submit Assignment 3 after Assignment 4.

I understand that you have transferred to the Fine Art pathway (from Creative Arts), therefore the assessment statement reflects this.

I will comment upon specific aspects under each of the headings.  In relation to you reflecting on and responding to feedback from assignment 4, you have acted on the feedback and this is informing how you are thinking about, planning and executing your drawings.

There is an increase in confidence in how you explore your chosen materials and this is informing the quality of your mark-making, composition and  building-up of the drawing.  It looks like you are considering how to build-up the drawing in stages.  What is of equal importance in editing and selecting the marks, tonal values and composition to best lead the viewer’s’ eye and convey your aims.

There has been a development in the quality of your reflections and they are much more honed, specific and thoughtful.  You make valuable and pertinent connections between research, your media, process and the aims you are setting yourself.  You are learning to be more concise and focussed in your reflections, whilst offering a deeper quality of analysis- less what you ‘do’ and more on the connections you make on your own and other’s work.

It is clear that throughout this assignment you are learning from the exercises, projects and reflected research.  You are then applying chosen aspects of your learning to the process of setting your aims, experimentation, prep and building-up the drawing.

Well done.

Assignment 3 Assessment potential

 “I understand your aim is to go for the B.A Fine Art Degree and that you plan to submit your work for assessment at the end of this course. From the work you have shown in this assignment, providing you commit yourself to the course, I believe you have the potential to succeed at assessment. In order to meet all the assessment criteria, there are certain areas you will need to focus on, which I will outline in my feedback.”assessment (see Conditions of Enrolment, Section 2 a). Contact the OCA Course Advisors to discuss this further.

   Feedback on assignment

Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity

 You undertook a number of rough preparatory drawings to explore the location, visual language and inform the assignment outcome.  Through your reflection and analysis you thoughtfully approached the planning of the final outcome in a purposeful and interesting way.

Through editing and selecting the key elements from each sketch, you were better able, to plan and compose the final outcome.  Your use of cropping and notations helped in your thought-process and decision-making.  These are good strategies and a practice to take forward and develop as you progress. (see Pointers)

In the final outcome, it’s good to see a rich, variety of mark-making qualities in chalk, charcoal and ink on cardboard.  There is a varied approach to both a lightness and density of working, this offers an interesting narrative in itself to the drawing.

The way in which you grid, layer and build-up the drawing can be read as an analogy to the construction of a building.  The framework of an early grid, dripping of ink and wash provide an interesting structure of marks and surface.  Then increasing in density of tone / mark (in some areas) and left leaner at the edges.  Can you see how this approach works well providing a juxtaposition of leaner aspects against more dense elements of the drawing.  This conveys a sense of depth and interest for the eye.  In future work it would be good to see you developing this consideration for what you choose to leave-out,  remove or edit and also what you put in or overlay. (see Pointers)

This assignment evidences an increased experimentation and confidence in the visual language, mark-making, composition and general analysis and decision-making in the process of making a drawing. Well done.


Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity

There is a lively experimentation across the sketchbooks.  This exploration is across media, digital and hand-drawn processes- evidencing good practice to continue and explore further, as you progress.

The sketchbooks have a sense of a genuine inquiry into media, composition, mark-making and linear qualities. There’s a joy and commitment to the quality of experimentation.  You are drawing upon your learning through this process.

Very good to see you varying your approaches throughout the sketchbook.  This experimentation allied with an analysis of what you are doing, how it’s working and how you can apply this to future work / an assignment outcome, is a valuable, useful process to develop.

The playing with and exploring of digital process and media, alongside wet, staining, blotting and layering offers exciting possibilities.  Ask how you might explore these processes and applications further?  These are ideas that have been emerging as you’ve progressed through the assignments.  This growing interest in low-tech and traditional processes (stains, blots, hand-collage, drawing) with digital:  print, photography, manipulation, editing and layering -digital collage. is exciting.  Are you interested in exploring these juxtapositions further?  (see Pointers / Research)

Ellen Gallagher ‘AxME’ Tate Modern, London

Dr.ME  Cut that out: Contemporary collage in Graphic Design

Wangechi Mutu

Hannah Hoch


Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

A good, varied yet pertinent range of primary and secondary sources.

Good consistent Harvard referencing throughout.

You are making connections between your research and the assignment itself.  You are becoming more concise yet purposeful in how you record and reflect on the research.  Continue to develop this as you progress.  This is good practice.

You are asking yourself questions as you progress, and in turn questions of the research you’re undertaking. Your reflection and analysis is deepening and as a result you are sifting and honing what is of purpose and value to your own development and practice.  Good practice to continue and develop.  (see Pointers).

See recommendations on ‘collage’ artists under Research / Viewing.

 Learning Logs or Blogs/Critical essays

Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

A well organised and structured blog evidencing your developing progress and the research and reflective analysis..

In this assignment there is a clearer synergy between your thinking, research and the drawing process. This has resulted in an increased confidence in your visual and reflective language.  Do continue to build upon this as you progress- trust to the process and strategies you have developed so far.  (see Pointers)

You have continued to use the blog as a reflective, analytical space. You have improved your logging of research and your quality of thinking.  By becoming more concise and analysing the purpose of asking questions, this has informed how you plan, experiment and make decisions throughout the assignment. Continue to do this through assignment 5 and as you progress.  Good progress here and this is increasing your reflections and drawing process.As you work on Assignment 5 you will need to hone your work for the assessment submission. To select work from across assignment 1 – 5 for your assessment (September submission for November deadline).  Look through the assessment guidelines and plan ahead:

Suggested reading/viewing


Collage including digital and traditional hand processes / combinations:

 Ellen Gallagher ‘AxME’ Tate Modern, London

Dr.ME  Cut that out: Contemporary collage in Graphic Design

Wangechi Mutu

Hannah Hoch

Pointers for the next assignment

  • Reflect critically on this feedback in your learning log.
  • Continue to use your preparatory drawings to help you decide which visual elements and composition you want to take into your final outcome. Ask yourself what these elements may convey: qualities in atmosphere, content / subject matter and tone (psychological or emotional).
  • Explore experimenting with the hand-drawn and digital elements of collage. This is offering interesting opportunities for experimenting.
  • As you progress to assignment 5: Reflect on the strategies and processes that you’ve found successful in this assignment. It is important for you to recognise what you have learned and how you are successfully applying this.  Take this confident approach into ass. 5.
  • Research into the artists working across collage: record which ones you feel some interest / connection with … what aspects interest you, how could you learn from and apply what you notice in your own work? Set some simple tasks to explore these connections.
  • If you haven’t yet started to: reflect and edit your portfolio for the formal assessment:

  • Follow-up on the research suggestions under Research and Suggested Reading / Viewing. Post your thoughts and analysis, and how you might apply this to your own thinking / making to your blog.

Please inform me of how you would like your feedback for the next assignment.   Written or video/audio

Well done, I look forward to assignment five.

Tutor name Cheryl Huntbach
Date 06/06/17
Next assignment due 25/07/17



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